tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post8990085890292201718..comments2024-01-05T10:46:06.674-06:00Comments on Scott D. Parker: Writer: Two Sentence Tuesday: Police EditionScott D. Parkerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15293540073601809197noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-2237177733698540652009-07-08T07:30:38.758-05:002009-07-08T07:30:38.758-05:00My character certainly has an objective: save the ...My character certainly has an objective: save the life of her partner who has a gun to his head, a gun held by the perp. Thanks.Scott D. Parkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15293540073601809197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-4054420021462424342009-07-07T17:30:39.361-05:002009-07-07T17:30:39.361-05:00Your lines are tense with a clear objective in sig...Your lines are tense with a clear objective in sight.Barbara Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00610140328527165017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-83097429502374400362009-07-07T15:37:44.955-05:002009-07-07T15:37:44.955-05:00Clare2e - How about "deep ---"? And that...Clare2e - How about "deep ---"? And that's an interesting conundrum you have going for you. Wonder how long before some people think my guy characters are really gals?<br /><br />Patti - The Two Sentence Tuesday posts are fun mainly, for me, because I like to see if the WIP sentences have any relation to the published sentences cited.Scott D. Parkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15293540073601809197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-69382842067095268202009-07-07T15:05:08.606-05:002009-07-07T15:05:08.606-05:00I really need to work on this, too.I really need to work on this, too.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-77792488064055338722009-07-07T10:45:22.645-05:002009-07-07T10:45:22.645-05:00Very nice, but I'm not sure "a pickle&quo...Very nice, but I'm not sure "a pickle" is how I'd describe her state : )<br /><br />My problem is that people even think some of my female characters read like men- go figure.Clare2ehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06105229820107294986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-77002937712001363542009-07-07T09:43:50.914-05:002009-07-07T09:43:50.914-05:00Charles - Tense is a good word. In fact, as I'...Charles - Tense is a good word. In fact, as I've rearranged the order of chapters for this crime story (this was chapter one), I've given some thought to submitting the chapter as a stand-alone story somewhere.<br /><br />David - Ironically, as flowery as I write, the short sentences also flow just as easily. Guess that's what I get when I read Dickens and Bruen.<br /><br />Leah - "Chilling." Boy, I like that word. My main goal with Anne is not to make her just a guy in a gal's skin. I want to make her a real woman. Now, having just read Max Allan Collins's "Deadly Beloved," I have more ideas how to do it.Scott D. Parkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15293540073601809197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-56174052492908538732009-07-07T08:04:33.000-05:002009-07-07T08:04:33.000-05:00Chilling, Scott. Bloody chilling.Chilling, Scott. Bloody chilling.Leah J. Utashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08497599109798015888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-64588161018097958212009-07-07T04:57:12.832-05:002009-07-07T04:57:12.832-05:00I'm with Charles: tense. And the short bursts ...I'm with Charles: tense. And the short bursts (sentences) aided the action nicely.David Cranmerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04749857752139212888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-440764593580848794.post-7309502204774616792009-07-07T01:49:32.226-05:002009-07-07T01:49:32.226-05:00I like your two lines. Tense.I like your two lines. Tense.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.com